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Post by HorrorLegend on Sept 6, 2009 21:28:01 GMT -5
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Post by toxic on Sept 7, 2009 5:04:04 GMT -5
Ah, a fellow writer on HG? I think this story has amazing potential but I spotted a few things that could use a looking-at. Just basic grammar stuff, no biggie but it can easily be fixed. If you plan on writing future chapters (I hope you do  ) then I would be happy to proofread for you if you wanted me to. My e-mail is in my profile if you decide you would like the p-r. |
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Post by HorrorLegend on Sept 7, 2009 14:02:15 GMT -5
Ah, a fellow writer on HG? I think this story has amazing potential but I spotted a few things that could use a looking-at. Just basic grammar stuff, no biggie but it can easily be fixed. If you plan on writing future chapters (I hope you do ) then I would be happy to proofread for you if you wanted me to. My e-mail is in my profile if you decide you would like the p-r. Ah yes. Finally some help! I have been waiting for someone to come along with some sort of insight and be able to help me! I am curious as to what the grammar issues are. You see, I hope to continue wit this story with the idea that I might progress with my writing abilities. =] |
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Post by toxic on Sept 7, 2009 18:07:41 GMT -5
Like I said, the grammar issues aren't really that big of a deal. In fact most of them are so miniscule that I almost missed them. They aren't really that many, just a few run-on sentences here and there, it's a quick fix. I think that you have so much potential as a writer, from what I have read so far the plot and basic idea of the story is excellent. And as for the insight, I write alot and have been mastering grammar and spelling/basic writing techniques for a few years now. I would be happy to help |
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Post by HorrorLegend on Sept 7, 2009 20:23:15 GMT -5
Like I said, the grammar issues aren't really that big of a deal. In fact most of them are so miniscule that I almost missed them. They aren't really that many, just a few run-on sentences here and there, it's a quick fix. I think that you have so much potential as a writer, from what I have read so far the plot and basic idea of the story is excellent. And as for the insight, I write alot and have been mastering grammar and spelling/basic writing techniques for a few years now. I would be happy to help  Thank you. =] I was introduced to Proboards as a writer actually. HorrorLegend's Stories was the very first site I created. I ran it for a little while with little to no activity except from the members you seen now such as DJ Bixxle and Theseanster. I was really inexperienced back then and my stories were kinda lame. They were fan fictions of classical horror movie icons. After a while I became a graphics artist and left the writing community behind.  But I wanted back in. ;D I would very much appreciate any help you can offer, and if you have posted stories yourself, I would love to read them. =] |
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Post by toxic on Sept 7, 2009 22:25:01 GMT -5
About the stories I have written o.O.... I can almost guarantee you would NOT want to read them XD I'm not going into details in the middle of this board, but I think you get the picture. And as for the help, just e-mail your next chapter to me and I will be happy to proofread and send it back. As an avid writer I will do anything I can to help fellow writers, so just send it over |
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Post by HorrorLegend on Sept 9, 2009 20:57:48 GMT -5
Ok.  Im not an e-mail kinda guy so sometimes I might just PM it to you on this site. You can check your PMs by looking in the info center on the homepage. Im sure you know how too. |
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Post by toxic on Sept 10, 2009 6:21:22 GMT -5
Yep I got it HL, thanks for putting some trust in me to help. I won't let you down |
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Post by foreverdreaming on Sept 11, 2009 23:39:11 GMT -5
I agree with Toxic, HL. Your story, or rather, the chapters I've read do have a lot of potential. I'm actually more of a writer than anything else. English Literature and History just happen to be my majors in University because of that.
I've won two writing competitions that were regional {the only two that I entered} and about 3 in my High School. I've only gotten one of my works published though - a poem.
I like your style and like Toxic said, you have a few grammatical errors, but I'm like a Grammar and Spelling Nazi - or so I've been told. Maybe it's because I use the British English and tend to say some American spellings are inaccurate..... -le blush-
Keep on writing HL, I'm looking forward to reading more. And if you're interested, I can send you some of the stuff I've written, but they're pretty sad and emotional. I only write when depressed....
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Post by HorrorLegend on Sept 13, 2009 20:56:44 GMT -5
I agree with Toxic, HL. Your story, or rather, the chapters I've read do have a lot of potential. I'm actually more of a writer than anything else. English Literature and History just happen to be my majors in University because of that.
I've won two writing competitions that were regional {the only two that I entered} and about 3 in my High School. I've only gotten one of my works published though - a poem.
I like your style and like Toxic said, you have a few grammatical errors, but I'm like a Grammar and Spelling Nazi - or so I've been told. Maybe it's because I use the British English and tend to say some American spellings are inaccurate..... -le blush-
Keep on writing HL, I'm looking forward to reading more. And if you're interested, I can send you some of the stuff I've written, but they're pretty sad and emotional. I only write when depressed....
- KH KRazy H! *hugs* First off I am so happy your back. =] Wow. =o Your successful, especially when compared to me. xD Its been on of my dreams to publish and excellent book. So In turn its been a dream to be an author. I really would appreciate ANY help both you and Toxic would like to offer. =] Feel free to send some of your work. Emotional literature is the best. =] To inform both of you, I am actually working on chapter 3 right now. I called it Visual Indifference. =] |
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) then I would be happy to proofread for you if you wanted me to. My e-mail is in my profile if you decide you would like the p-r.